anglais LV A et LV B (prépas ECG et ECT) · Chapitre 6 · Exercice de TD
Un entraînement au format d'HEC de 2022, réduit
L'oral : présenter, commenter, dialoguer · niveau 3 (difficile)
Énoncé
Préparer en vingt minutes, à partir du document suivant (écrit pour ce livre, environ 200 mots), la feuille de notes d'un oral : introduction rédigée, synthèse en mots clés, problématique, deux axes de commentaire avec un exemple chacun, conclusion rédigée. Puis rédiger la synthèse telle qu'on la dirait en deux à trois minutes. When the city of Northam introduced a congestion charge five years ago, local shopkeepers predicted the end of the high street. Drivers would go to out-of-town retail parks, they warned, and the city centre would die. The figures published last month by the council tell a different story. Traffic in the charging zone has fallen by roughly a quarter, bus journeys are faster, and footfall in the main shopping streets is slightly higher than before the scheme. Yet the picture is not entirely rosy. Several small businesses on the edge of the zone say they have lost customers to the suburbs, and residents of poorer outlying districts, where public transport is sparse, complain that they are paying to reach the jobs and services concentrated in the centre. The council intends to use the revenue, some fourteen million pounds a year, to extend bus routes. Critics reply that they have heard such promises before. The debate in Northam is no longer about whether the charge works, but about whom it works for. (Northam est une ville imaginaire ; les chiffres font partie du document.)
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Intro (rédigée) : This document looks back on five years of a congestion charge in the city of Northam. The scheme seems to have worked, but the article suggests that the real question has shifted: not whether the charge works, but for whom.
Synthèse (mots clés) : fears 5 yrs ago (shopkeepers, high street dies) / council figures: traffic minus one quarter, buses faster, footfall slightly up / BUT edge-of-zone shops, poorer districts without buses: pay to reach jobs / revenue 14 million pounds a year for buses / critics sceptical / who benefits?
Problématique : Can an environmental policy be effective and fair at the same time?
Axe 1 : efficacité réelle (trafic, bus, commerce) ; exemple : la congestion charge de Londres, introduite en 2003, souvent citée comme modèle. Axe 2 : l'équité dépend de l'alternative ; exemple : le document lui-même (quartiers pauvres sans bus), et l'idée qu'une taxe uniforme pèse plus sur les bas revenus.
Conclusion (rédigée) : So the charge seems to work as a traffic policy; whether it works as a social policy depends on what is done with the money. A green measure that leaves the poorest behind is unlikely to last.
Synthèse dite : The article reviews five years of a congestion charge in Northam. At the time, shopkeepers feared it would kill the city centre. The council's latest figures suggest the opposite: traffic in the zone is down by about a quarter, buses run faster, and slightly more people visit the main shopping streets. However, the article points to two groups who have lost out: small businesses on the edge of the zone, and residents of poorer districts with few buses, who now pay to reach the centre. The council plans to spend the revenue, around fourteen million pounds a year, on new bus routes, but critics doubt it will. In short, the debate has moved from efficiency to fairness.
Ce qui fait la note : deux données chiffrées citées, comme le recommandait le jury d'HEC ; les points de vue attribués (shopkeepers, the council, critics) ; une dernière phrase qui sert de transition. L'exemple de Londres est historique et daté, sans chiffre invérifiable.
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