Condenser par le groupe nominal

Le groupe nominal : articles, noms, adjectifs, prépositions · niveau 3 (difficile)

Énoncé

Ce paragraphe d'essai, écrit pour ce livre, est correct mais de niveau B2. Le réécrire au niveau C1 en condensant les relatives et les périphrases en groupes nominaux (noms composés, adjectifs composés, génitifs), sans perdre d'information : Many families that have low incomes live in areas that are far from the centre. They spend a lot of time on transport, and the prices of energy, which are rising, make the problem worse. The policy of the government, which aims to reduce the use of cars, is good for the environment, but it is bad for people who live in the countryside, who have no other way to go to work.

Corrigé

Proposition : Many low-income families live in outlying areas. Long commutes eat into their time, and rising energy prices compound the problem. The government's car-reduction policy may be good for the environment, but it penalises rural workers, who have no alternative means of getting to work.

Ce qui a changé. Families that have low incomes devient low-income families (adjectif composé) ; areas that are far from the centre, outlying areas ; the prices of energy, which are rising, rising energy prices (participe épithète et nom composé) ; the policy of the government, which aims to reduce the use of cars, the government's car-reduction policy (génitif et nom composé) ; people who live in the countryside, rural workers. Le lexique se précise aussi : make worse devient compound, bad for devient penalise, other way devient alternative means. Le paragraphe passe de 73 à 44 mots, sans perte d'information : c'est exactement ce que demande le résumé.

Le risque : empiler les noms. The government car use reduction policy impact est illisible ; au-delà de trois noms, revenir à of.

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