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Modèle : Anonymous sourcing arguably remains indispensable to investigative journalism. Admittedly, unnamed sources make it harder for readers to assess a claim, and a number of commentators have raised concerns about the practice. Yet whistleblowers are unlikely to speak at all if their identity can be traced, and several landmark stories — from Watergate to the Panama Papers — would not have existed under a stricter rule. Consequently, the question is not whether anonymity should be permitted, but how it should be governed: newsrooms could be required to shed light on their verification procedures, even when they cannot name their source.

Grille de correction en quatre points :

• la topic sentence ouvre le paragraphe et annonce la position tenue ;
• les deux collocations sont bien celles du chapitre et sont employées correctement (raise concerns, shed light on) ;
• la concession est dépassée, non simplement mentionnée : Admittedly… Yet…, et la conséquence est marquée (Consequently) ;
• le hedging est présent sans excès (arguably, are unlikely to, could be required) : deux ou trois marques suffisent, davantage rendrait le paragraphe fuyant.